Want to see me take a hit? If so, watch my pitch be reviewed on the QQQE hosted by Matthew MacNish. I won't lie...it was brutal, but it was also an eye opener.
My initial pitch was vague. The version in the QQQE post was utterly horrible - I seriously don't know what I was thinking. I blame the weather and lack of running due to the snow.
The critique was harsh, but totally warranted, and all the comments were very helpful. I recommend folks to test their pitch on the QQQE first, to get some honest feedback.
There was one comment that put it all into focus, kind of like a slap in the face and a shout, "Tanya, just tell me the main story damn you!"
And so, in the end, here is the final version (for now) of the pitch to Family Relic / Box of Souls. All critique and comments welcome. Please. They can only make things better. I know this for a FACT!
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Family Relics - The Box of Souls
Even the darkest magic can't break the bonds of family.
When eighteen-year-old Jasmyn's grandmother passes away, it is eight-year-old Katarina who begins to display their grandmother's gift of magic. This newest rejection proves Jasmyn's life-long claim that her family loves Katarina more than they love her. Instead of mourning with her family, Jasmyn shuts everyone out of her life and suffers her grandmother’s death alone.
After the funeral, sinister dragons appear along the California coastline, and only Katarina can stop them. When her spells fail, her family discovers it is because she didn't inherit all of their grandmother's magic and that her grandmother's magic was split between the two sisters. Now, Jasmyn and Katarina must put their rivalry aside and work together to stop the menace. There's just one problem: a feud that occurred earlier in the day pinned the entire family against Jasmyn and forced her to run away. Their magic will work only if they work together, and every moment the sisters are apart the dragons grow stronger.
Can the sisters reunite in time to stop the dragons from destroying mankind? Can Jasmyn put her pain and resentment aside to wield her grandmother's magic? The bond of sisterhood is strong, but so are powers of darkness.
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